I'm not a musician and don't have any critical feedback, but as a fan of Actually Emo from the Texas is the Reason/Sunny Day Real Estate/Kinsella era, I think this is pretty cool. Maybe some more...
I'm not a musician and don't have any critical feedback, but as a fan of Actually Emo from the Texas is the Reason/Sunny Day Real Estate/Kinsella era, I think this is pretty cool. Maybe some more dynamics in the vocals, could crescendo bigger with the others especially in the 2nd chorus.
Yeah, our vocalist/rhythm is getting back into the swing of things and is going to start taking vocal lessons soon, so we're definitely going to improve on that front. As soon as I learn to sing...
Yeah, our vocalist/rhythm is getting back into the swing of things and is going to start taking vocal lessons soon, so we're definitely going to improve on that front. As soon as I learn to sing and play well, I'll probably throw some harmonies down wherever I think they'd fit. By crescendo bigger, do you mean the bass specifically? There's a lot more tinkering I'd like to do with this line, especially with the riff in the higher end. Dunno what yet, though haha
In a lot of ways I'm a really basic music fan. For every unlistenable obscure band I like, there's a pop album that I've absolutely worn out and when I think of song structure and making it really...
In a lot of ways I'm a really basic music fan. For every unlistenable obscure band I like, there's a pop album that I've absolutely worn out and when I think of song structure and making it really obvious to the listener what is happening, pop music (of all genres) does a great job. And for me where this song fails is that it's a tad bit too monotone. I'm not totally sure which parts of the song are which without really listening. I think the drums and guitars do a pretty good job of ramping it up and changing pace in the proper places, but the vocals are kinda flat.
In my comment when I said "2nd chorus" I had to go back and listen again because I wasn't sure it was the 2nd chorus since the first one didn't really stand out. Basically, I think the high points of the song should be higher. Think of like The Pixies where it's almost comical how much the volume & energy of the verse and chorus contrast (Check out their track "Tame", literally goes from whisper to scream). I think Nirvana Smells like teen Spirit is actually a caricature of that style.
Anyway, those examples are extremes, but that's a pretty standard attribute of songs that always grab me on the first listen. When I'm taken on a semi-predictable roller coaster of contrasting volume and energy dynamics. If your song goes from a 3 to a 4 energy-wise, it's going to be less interesting than one that goes from 2 - 5.
I hadn't thought of that, but you're totally right! I'll see if there's anyway we can try to make it a bit louder in the chorus/whatever section of the song we want to crescendo. We're gonna work...
I hadn't thought of that, but you're totally right! I'll see if there's anyway we can try to make it a bit louder in the chorus/whatever section of the song we want to crescendo. We're gonna work on our vocalist belting it out a little stronger, and it'll probably sound much, much better when we all get recording equipment haha. We were thinking about switching the acoustic guitar to an electric, so maybe we can throw some distortion on for the second chorus to spice things up. I think the first chorus doesn't stand out much because our vocalist decided to throw the chorus in first thing (after the short) intro. A lively chorus after the soft one might shake things up! Thanks so much for your feedback, these aren't things I'd have expected.
Our rhythm guitarist showed us a song he had written a bit of and I immediately jumped in with a bassline and the drummer followed shortly thereafter. We now love our new song. I'd love some...
Our rhythm guitarist showed us a song he had written a bit of and I immediately jumped in with a bassline and the drummer followed shortly thereafter. We now love our new song. I'd love some feedback, advice, or criticism of the track (beyond the shitty quality; we don't have great audio recording equipment). Thank you in advance!
I'm not a musician and don't have any critical feedback, but as a fan of Actually Emo from the Texas is the Reason/Sunny Day Real Estate/Kinsella era, I think this is pretty cool. Maybe some more dynamics in the vocals, could crescendo bigger with the others especially in the 2nd chorus.
Yeah, our vocalist/rhythm is getting back into the swing of things and is going to start taking vocal lessons soon, so we're definitely going to improve on that front. As soon as I learn to sing and play well, I'll probably throw some harmonies down wherever I think they'd fit. By crescendo bigger, do you mean the bass specifically? There's a lot more tinkering I'd like to do with this line, especially with the riff in the higher end. Dunno what yet, though haha
In a lot of ways I'm a really basic music fan. For every unlistenable obscure band I like, there's a pop album that I've absolutely worn out and when I think of song structure and making it really obvious to the listener what is happening, pop music (of all genres) does a great job. And for me where this song fails is that it's a tad bit too monotone. I'm not totally sure which parts of the song are which without really listening. I think the drums and guitars do a pretty good job of ramping it up and changing pace in the proper places, but the vocals are kinda flat.
In my comment when I said "2nd chorus" I had to go back and listen again because I wasn't sure it was the 2nd chorus since the first one didn't really stand out. Basically, I think the high points of the song should be higher. Think of like The Pixies where it's almost comical how much the volume & energy of the verse and chorus contrast (Check out their track "Tame", literally goes from whisper to scream). I think Nirvana Smells like teen Spirit is actually a caricature of that style.
Anyway, those examples are extremes, but that's a pretty standard attribute of songs that always grab me on the first listen. When I'm taken on a semi-predictable roller coaster of contrasting volume and energy dynamics. If your song goes from a 3 to a 4 energy-wise, it's going to be less interesting than one that goes from 2 - 5.
I hadn't thought of that, but you're totally right! I'll see if there's anyway we can try to make it a bit louder in the chorus/whatever section of the song we want to crescendo. We're gonna work on our vocalist belting it out a little stronger, and it'll probably sound much, much better when we all get recording equipment haha. We were thinking about switching the acoustic guitar to an electric, so maybe we can throw some distortion on for the second chorus to spice things up. I think the first chorus doesn't stand out much because our vocalist decided to throw the chorus in first thing (after the short) intro. A lively chorus after the soft one might shake things up! Thanks so much for your feedback, these aren't things I'd have expected.
Our rhythm guitarist showed us a song he had written a bit of and I immediately jumped in with a bassline and the drummer followed shortly thereafter. We now love our new song. I'd love some feedback, advice, or criticism of the track (beyond the shitty quality; we don't have great audio recording equipment). Thank you in advance!