Lots of repetition don’t help this poem. It also lacks metaphor, mental images, juxtaposition. The sentences are too blunt without sophistication. This reads like a journal entry, you should put...
Lots of repetition don’t help this poem. It also lacks metaphor, mental images, juxtaposition. The sentences are too blunt without sophistication. This reads like a journal entry, you should put more work on something that is intended for public consumption.
Lots of repetition don’t help this poem. It also lacks metaphor, mental images, juxtaposition. The sentences are too blunt without sophistication. This reads like a journal entry, you should put more work on something that is intended for public consumption.
Bonus tip: try writing smaller poems.