Burmese School Girls ~2012
This is a photo I took in rural Myanmar October of 2012. We were on a group trek from the city of Kalaw to Inle Lake. We stopped at a school in one of the rural towns to meet the kids and donate supplies. We arrived during their school day but their teacher allowed us 30 minutes to an hour (can't remember) to play with and talk to the kids. It was an absolute blast, the kids were full of energy and opened up to the group quickly.
The school was a single room school house where all ages study together. The teacher for this school was young and from another city/town/village. We were told that the community provided her food and shelter in trade for her teaching the kids. If money was required for something, maybe transportation back home, they would come together to help. I do not know the ethnicity of the community or kids, other than Burmese.
Please critique the above write up, both grammatically and content wise, and help me with suggestions of titles. I severely lack in title creativity/ability.
This is a great pic to share with that story, so thank you!
To give you some constructive criticism with the writeup, as requested, I would say to not be so unsure of yourself. You're crafting a narrative, both with your words and the picture, so control your own narrative. Don't get bogged down in the details, and questioning your own specifics. Instead of "allowed us 30 minutes to an hour (can't remember)" try "allowed us time to play with the kids". The specificity of the length of time is not fundamental to the story, and can distract from the power of the message overall.
Thanks so much. I appreciate the help.