7 votes

June.

You know they’ve got poetry on Spotify? That’s some cool shit. Ended up following John Cooper Clarke into a rabbit hole of other British poets.

Decided to bite and try writing a bit of poetry for poetry’s sake.

Anyway. ‘Ere go. “June.”

I thought your voice was music

And your beauty - work of art.

I found your jokes amusing,

Ponygirl, a golden heart.

Your company, a journey

Which I never could depart

I really felt I loved you,

Well, I did once, at the start.

.

See, music can be different

Some songs good, and others crap.

Some begin melodically,

Then get crashing in a snap.

Starting subtle violins,

Then it blares with metal scrap

They lure you malevolent

Some music is a trap.

.

Some artists Donatello,

Others Jackson Pollock.

Some art goes well with wine,

Some turns you alcoholic.

Some is deep and intricate,

Some is purely bollocks

Can’t call this a masterpiece

I’m not sure what to call it.

.

Thought your lips were pure cuisine

And your beauty - work of art.

I never thought the kitchen

Would have mold and rot at heart.

The oven sent asunder

All the counters ripped apart

You’re a diner with one dish,

And it’s a dry and sour tart.

4 comments

  1. [4]
    The_Fad Link
    Is this your first foray into poetry or do you have a background in it?

    Is this your first foray into poetry or do you have a background in it?

    2 votes
    1. [3]
      Bishop Link Parent
      Ehh. “Background” we’ll call it. I’ve been writing poetry (predominantly in form of lyrics) off and on for the better part of the last decade. (I only tend to write whenever I’m going through...

      Ehh. “Background” we’ll call it.

      I’ve been writing poetry (predominantly in form of lyrics) off and on for the better part of the last decade. (I only tend to write whenever I’m going through darker times.)

      In full honesty I don’t remember whether I’ve written... how to call it, “real” poetry before. But I’ve definitely read a bit before and tend to otherwise surround myself with the arts.

      So, in short, that was a long winded way of saying “I’d consider myself a writer, but I don’t know whether this would be considered my first foyer* in to poetry or not.”

      * this is so beyond not the right word, I’m just not sure what the word is. It’s a French loanword I believe, synonymous with “venture”.

      3 votes
      1. [2]
        The_Fad Link Parent
        That makes more sense, then. The work is very well structured and compartmentalized, with each stanza serving its own purpose and furthering the whole. The rhyming scheme is simple but appropriate...

        That makes more sense, then. The work is very well structured and compartmentalized, with each stanza serving its own purpose and furthering the whole. The rhyming scheme is simple but appropriate for the style. You mentioned you write lyrics predominately which is very much on display here; this is a good thing. Your penchant for rhyme and word flow is exquisite, even having read only this piece.

        The subject matter is nothing new of course, especially to a songwriter such as yourself, but as a means to stretch your creative legs and broaden those same horizons it works very well. You weren't setting out to rewrite the medium, so it would be silly to have that expectation.

        In four words I would describe the piece thusly: "Vivid, choral, and heartfelt." You've clearly long-since found your voice as a writer (in any respect), and to be frank the written word world is your oyster, so to speak. You confidently use the tools you've learned (for example, crafting each stanza as thematic unto itself while continuing the "story" being told) and I would be interested in reading or hearing some of the music you've made, assuming you'd be willing to share.

        It's a bit of a pearl-clutcher to compare poetry to prose in the way I just did, so forgive me if I offend; this was not my intent. I simply come from a prose background and so view things naturally through that lens.

        Long story short, I give your work 5 Jakes out of 5 possible Jakes. Though its subject matter is quite familiar, you present it creatively and craft an optic that paints a (sometimes beautifully lurid) image that anyone can relate to. Well done!

        3 votes
        1. Bishop Link Parent
          Holy shit I might actually cry. That’s the nicest thing that anyone’s ever said to me hahaha. I honestly don’t even know how to reply. Thank you! I’m really glad you liked the piece. :) The sun...

          Holy shit I might actually cry. That’s the nicest thing that anyone’s ever said to me hahaha.

          I honestly don’t even know how to reply.

          Thank you! I’m really glad you liked the piece. :) The sun was out and the sky was blue today, so I guess I had to write some drain-y shit to counteract all that positivity hahaha.

          I’ve got another post in the works; small collection of a few small related pieces. Might save it for tomorrow though.

          I’m really prone to rambling innit.

          ANYWAY.

          Thank you! I haven’t actually started making any music yet; more so just keeping the lyric-writing side of me fresh whilst I teach myself piano and save up for a guitar. Once I do finally lay my first track down I’ll be sure to post it here.

          Again, I’m glad you liked it. :) Thanks for taking the time to read it!

          3 votes