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can you have a painting made with just one color?

can you have a painting made with just one color?

the walls stopped leaking
they broke down
the water is pouring in
it has long ago turned brown
literally floating shit
was it ever clear?

the ice stopped melting
why that frown
the truth is coming in
the good guys have the crown
back then there weren't any queers
things were better, isn't that clear?

i think overall we drink cleaner water than before

6 comments

  1. [5]
    kfwyre
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    I'd be interested in hearing a little bit about the message/meaning you're trying to convey (if any). The lines "back then there weren't any queers / things were better, isn't that clear?" makes...

    I'd be interested in hearing a little bit about the message/meaning you're trying to convey (if any). The lines "back then there weren't any queers / things were better, isn't that clear?" makes me think this is written as a sardonic take from a conservative perspective. It reminds me a bit of Brand New's "Desert" in that regard. That said, even coming at it from that angle I still can't put all the pieces together, which makes me think I might be on the complete wrong track.

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    1. [4]
      cfabbro
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      Yeah, that line in particular raised my defensive hackles a bit even though I interpreted it as sarcasm. And I wouldn't mind some clarification on the meaning of the poem too, since I'm somewhat...

      Yeah, that line in particular raised my defensive hackles a bit even though I interpreted it as sarcasm. And I wouldn't mind some clarification on the meaning of the poem too, since I'm somewhat perplexed by it as well. Not that all poetry needs to have meaning, but I'm just curious if there was any intended.

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      1. [3]
        Tygrak
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        @kfwyre That is pretty much it. The first part is from the point of view of someone like me, pretty much catastrophizing when I look at the news. The second part is me trying to write from the...

        @kfwyre

        That is pretty much it. The first part is from the point of view of someone like me, pretty much catastrophizing when I look at the news. The second part is me trying to write from the point of view of someone, who doesn't mind the types of governments getting to power in Hungary, Poland, US, Turkey and many other countries of the world. The ending line is me trying to accept the fact that even though the world looks like it's going to shit, it's actually still been getting much better over time.

        By the way, Desert is an incredible song from an incredible album! That "I've seen those boys kissing boys" line is pretty much burned into my mind. I wish the lead singer wasn't who he is (was?), but the songs this band made are so powerful, I can't not listen to them.

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        1. cfabbro
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          Thanks for the explanation. After reading your reply and then rereading the poem afterwards it makes a lot more sense to me now, and IMO is a lot more compelling with the added context as well!

          Thanks for the explanation. After reading your reply and then rereading the poem afterwards it makes a lot more sense to me now, and IMO is a lot more compelling with the added context as well!

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        2. kfwyre
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          I feel the exact same way about Brand New. They were a favorite band of mine for a long time, and I think Science Fiction is deeply resonant and affecting, but I also have a hard time listening to...

          I feel the exact same way about Brand New. They were a favorite band of mine for a long time, and I think Science Fiction is deeply resonant and affecting, but I also have a hard time listening to them now on account of the lead singer's actions.

          As for your poem, it makes so much more sense now that I realize there are two different perspectives! I was trying to fit it all in one coherent whole, assuming the same speaker the whole way through, which of course doesn't work as the two main stanzas are deliberately opposed. Thank you for sharing your thoughts on it.

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  2. Tygrak
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    Procrastinating from learning for my exams. I don't think I am very good at poetry, haha. But it's funny how I am the most creative when I really should be doing other stuff.

    Procrastinating from learning for my exams. I don't think I am very good at poetry, haha. But it's funny how I am the most creative when I really should be doing other stuff.

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