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Writing Club #3—"Madness" (Submissions)
Shakespeare's birthday is observed today. Thank you, verily, for sharing your writing!
Please post your efforts below, with an introduction and/or questions for your readers.
Here are the guidelines, again.
So I've edited my story from the last writing club and I think it is way better now, although I fear it reads less like a short story and more like a first chapter of a longer story. I don't think it's bad per se, but the story just has a lot of plot threads that aren't resolved. I've shown it to one person so far (yes I'm shy about showing this stuff off okay) and she liked it, so here goes nothing.
Link to the PDF
Thank you @etiolation and please also extend my thanks to your wife as well for her generous correcting. I ended up rewriting a lot and her pointers were incredibly, incredibly helpful.
Addendum: Had wrong link. Fixed now. Sorry.
Good on you; we were both happy to do it!
This seems to have stopped. Why is that? If participation was low, maybe we could change something make it easier for people to participate?
Thanks for checking in. I'd love to resurrect this.
Interest plummeted. Folks may have been busy with re-opening and summer. I might have a blindspot, but I think the guidelines were about as open as could be: prose or poetry on any theme (not exclusive to the inspiration), less than 7,000 words. Maybe there are other ways to make it easier.
Another reason could be that I crept away under a blanket of depression, so the enterprise may have suffered from lack of a cheerleader. But count me in.
Hey, no problem! Writing is hard, everyone wants to show their best, and that's not always possible. Fluctuation is to be expected. I hope you're better from your "blanket of depression", I also get those. Let me know if you wanna talk!
I don't think I'm a good cheerleader, but I do have a few ideas that might help (and which also might make this easier on you).
So, what ya think?
Even though I am a month late, I have finished my next work. I feel like this time, it is way more in line with the theme. I'll keep writing in this world, and I like writing short stories, the quick iteration allows for improvement much better than writing long-form plots. If someone read the last story too, I wonder if there is improvement or if I am just imagining it.
This time I also had an outline from the start and knew what I was going to do, so it is way more closed off than the last one. Though I have some ideas for the mysteries left in Sofia's story that could serve as good plots for sequel stories continuing her journey.
This time, after I read through it and edited, I also ran it through MS Word, so hopefully there'll be less errors.
Link to the PDF
I hope I was able to maintain this feeling of the world I evoked last time, even though the theme is very different in this piece. I'm looking forward to feedback and I hope you like it!
EDIT: As for questions, is there a particular part of Ostia that you're wondering about? How it works, how it looks? It would be interesting to read how people think about fictional worlds.