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49 votes
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The problem with film criticism
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We're in a time loop of time loop movies
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The Last of Us Part II tries to be profound. It fails.
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Poetry analysis/appreciation request - Morning, by Frank O'Hara
I'm an undoubted pleb when it comes to just about everything artistic (with the exception of music, in which I have impeccable taste). A while back, I suggested I'd be interested in seeing some...
I'm an undoubted pleb when it comes to just about everything artistic (with the exception of music, in which I have impeccable taste). A while back, I suggested I'd be interested in seeing some critique or general discussion of already-known or published poetry, if only so I could get others' opinions on things that usually go over my head. This is an effort to get the ball rolling, with a poem that is one of my favorites.
Also, I'm not sure if this belongs here or in ~arts, please classify as appropriate.
Morning - Frank O'Hara
I've got to tell you
how I love you always
I think of it on grey
mornings with deathin my mouth the tea
is never hot enough
then and the cigarette
dry the maroon robechills me I need you
and look out the window
at the noiseless snowAt night on the dock
the buses glow like
clouds and I am lonely
thinking of flutesI miss you always
when I go to the beach
the sand is wet with
tears that seem minealthough I never weep
and hold you in my
heart with a very real
humor you'd be proud ofthe parking lot is
crowded and I stand
rattling my keys the car
is empty as a bicyclewhat are you doing now
where did you eat your
lunch and were there
lots of anchovies itis difficult to think
of you without me in
the sentence you depress
me when you are aloneLast night the stars
were numerous and today
snow is their calling
card I'll not be cordialthere is nothing that
distracts me music is
only a crossword puzzle
do you know how it iswhen you are the only
passenger if there is a
place further from me
I beg you do not go7 votes -
In retrospect it seems hard to overstate the cultural damage done by South Park
@danaschwartzzz: In retrospect, it seems impossible to overstate the cultural damage done by SOUTH PARK, the show that portrayed earnestness as the only sin and taught that mockery is the ultimate inoculation against all criticism
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CoD Modern Warfare pulls every punch that Spec Ops: The Line didn't
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I finally finished a novel
I've finally finished writing something. It's been about four years since I actually finished something nicely. I'm entering the editing phase, which generally takes longer... But I'm a bit...
I've finally finished writing something. It's been about four years since I actually finished something nicely.
I'm entering the editing phase, which generally takes longer... But I'm a bit excited.
Hopefully this is an acceptable thing to talk about, and I'm going about things the right way.
So... To spin off into discussion, here's two things:
A part of the story:
The ground rose up and struck Raul in the face.
He blinked, stumbling backwards, seeing his master standing nearby.
The old man was glaring, his hands clutched around a brightly coloured stone.
Raul opened his mouth to question, but the old man was whisked away to a distance hillside, and the boy found himself tumbling head over heals backwards down a hillside.
He scrambled onto his knees, staring as he found himself on the shore of the lighthouse.
His master placed a solid hand on his shoulder, and muttered gibberish.
Raul glanced up, but found himself staring at the light of the lighthouse.
Spinning.
A bright light, round and round.
Lightning struck him, and Raul screamed, stumbling backwards.
The rod lay in front of him.
He tore his gaze away with effort, and saw his master, hands outstretched, the stone of red, gold and silver floating between them.
Almost as astonishing, the stone was clean.
A hammer hit him between the eyes.
Raul found himself stumbling behind his father, watching as the old man struck stone, separated it, revealing the river of solid copper within it.
"Boy!"
I'm hoping I've got the grammar at least semi-right. My illness means I can forget words, or my brain can replace words at random with others that it thinks are related.
Any guidance or critique is welcome. (I'd give a bigger quote... But this is probably more than enough to discuss.)
The build script I'm using:
#!/bin/sh set -e if [ -z "$1" ]; then echo 'Please provide an output file name.' >&2 exit 1 fi tmp=$(mktemp) echo 'Building...' cat title.txt > "$tmp" echo '' >> "$tmp" cat LICENSE.md >> "$tmp" echo '' >> "$tmp" cat Prologue.md >> "$tmp" for file in 0*.md; do echo '' >> "$tmp" cat "$file" >> "$tmp" done for file in 1*.md; do echo '' >> "$tmp" cat "$file" >> "$tmp" done echo 'Converting...' pandoc --toc "$tmp" -o "$1" 2>/dev/null rm "$tmp" echo 'Done'
title.txt
is basically just YAML markup for pandoc. The other files should be fairly obvious.I'm silencing pandoc's output, because I make use of a self-reference to add comments to the Markdown, that get killed by the parser and never make it to the output:
[//]: # (This is a Markdown comment. Isn't that cool?)
However, as all the references point to themselves, pandoc warns.
I'm using pandoc this time around, because it produces fairly clean files. I've used GitBook and Calibre in the past, and though the ebooks they produce work and look okay, the amount of crazy markup they produce means the books lag on some ereaders.
However, that does make a lot of back and forth. Building, checking output, rebuilding, etc.
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Let's play "Critique the Critique"
There's a really awesome thread on constructive criticism with a lot of thoughtful insight about the process. What makes criticism helpful? What causes more harm than good? What's the best way to...
There's a really awesome thread on constructive criticism with a lot of thoughtful insight about the process. What makes criticism helpful? What causes more harm than good? What's the best way to go about asking for a critique?
I wanted to play a little game where we can turn the tables on the process and examine what makes critiques tick. At the same time, it'll give folks a chance to share some of their creations. The idea is to critique the critiques based off of how the requests are presented.
To quote @silva-rerum from the other thread,
Context and empathy are both incredibly important when it comes to the delivery and impact of creative criticism. Most people who deliver critiques while failing to contextualize or understand their recipient’s perspective will be engaging in an exercise in futility at best, or an act of cruelty at worst.
I think it would be a fun exercise to experiment with how much context can affect how good or bad a critique is.
Rules:
Content
Content should be something of your own, whether it's writing, music, physical works, visual, or whatever. If you made it and you're down to post it for some criticism, it fits.
Context
It's entirely up to you what kind of context you'd like to provide. The game is about finding what works and what doesn't, and context can play a huge factor in the quality of the critique. If you want to try to see what kind of criticism zero-context requests elicit, post your work with zero context. Alternatively, you can see what kind of critique you get from high-context, specifically targeted feedback requests.
(If you haven't read through some of the ideas in the other thread, check it out before posting. There really are some great insights in there even if you aren't planning on posting anything.)Critiques
Perform your critiques for others as you normally would. Obviously, keep it civil. Multiple people can offer their critiques for each item up for critique. Since we're playing around with different degrees of context, try to critique on a case-by-case basis. That is, if you have more context for a critique than is proffered, try your best to set that extra context aside. There may be fudge-factor involved with that, but I think we can still end up with some interesting results.
Counter-critiques
Counter-critiques are open to all! It will definitely be helpful to hear from the creator how helpful or hurtful the critique was. If other people have input or questions, discuss away!
Side note: I don't think I've ever typed/thought the word "critique" so much in my life.
I'll put together some stuff I've worked on recently to get thing started.
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Constructive critiques - a question on tone
I would like to have everyone weigh in on constructive critique style for ~creative. :) Most of the critiques given so far in ~creative have been very light and amiable. People are feeling their...
I would like to have everyone weigh in on constructive critique style for ~creative. :)
Most of the critiques given so far in ~creative have been very light and amiable. People are feeling their way into what is acceptable, and don't wish to offend. Today we've had an extremely high level critique by Trin (awesome feedback, btw!) And I'm caught between cheering and covering my eyes.
Cheering because having this level of critique in ~creative is worth gold. To have members of the community capable and willing to devote this much care is incredible. It takes a LOT of time and energy to give this sort of feedback. Some people search and pay money for feedback like this, and still can't find someone good enough to give it.
Covering my eyes because many people don't understand or want such thoroughness, and I'm imagining all the new writers/crafters/artists running for the hills and never posting again.
I am extremely reluctant to fling a "critique scale request" out there. That often seems to polarize posts. Also...if someone reads your work, views your art, enjoys your craft enough to give you the compliment of a deep critique...wouldn't you want it?
Let's hear what people want! I personally want all levels of submitters comfortable in ~creative. But I also want it to be a place that encourages growth instead of just ego stroking. :)
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A thorough look at Far Cry
7 votes